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screenplay help

Postby crit32884 » Thu Nov 10, 2016 5:02 pm

kaiego episode one

logline: a young boy with a cynical viewpoint on life ends up becoming the next bearer of an ancient nature spirit.

main concerns:
  • grammar needs refining
  • how can I make it more appealing to kids as well as teens and adults?
  • anything else that needs fixing, too.
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Re: screenplay help

Postby crit33533 » Sat Jun 17, 2017 5:53 am

A few quick considerations:

In screenplays, it is customary to put all action in present tense only.

Industry readers (and in literature, agents & editors) generally complain about excessive world-building on page 1. Spooling out description as needed lets one get to interesting action and dialogue sooner.
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